Critique my Resume please! Forum

[meegee]

EDIT: Thanks for the advice guys, I've made some major revisions to my resume. I've taken the link down because I don't want my info floating out there. Once again, thank you all!

[rinkrat19]

You absolutely need contact info on a resume. Non-negotiable.

Put Education first. (This is an academic resume.)
Put Honors in the Education section.
Remove the computer/OS skills.
Add a personal interests line.

Your job descriptions are a little problematic. You've got multiple bullet points within each bullet point. Edit those down to 3-4 single-line bullet points per job.

Are the Phone-A-Thon and Democratic Party jobs volunteer? If so, put them in a separate section or make it clear that they are.

It is possible to fit six jobs and contact info on one page.

Here's my current resume, genericized and redacted. Red is stuff that has been added since starting law school. The resume I applied to law school with was basically the same design before cramming the new stuff in, except with more relaxed spacing. There may have been a third bullet point under the older jobs.

[meegee]

Thanks for the suggestions rinkrat, I will put my contact info back in.
Ken's guide said to put work experience before academic if you are no longer in school: "If you are no longer in school, work should come first." Should I put my academic stuff first, or should I keep the work experience before? I'll also merge my honors/activities with my education part.

I will edit my job description and shorten them. I'll also remove that useless line about computer/os.

Is it necessary to include a personal interests section? Will they actually care?

I will also make a separate header for Internships. My internships include the Democratic Party volunteer work and my internship with Box Solutions. The Phonathon was a campus job.

[rinkrat19]

Thanks for the suggestions rinkrat, I will put my contact info back in.
Ken's guide said to put work experience before academic if you are no longer in school: "If you are no longer in school, work should come first." Should I put my academic stuff first, or should I keep the work experience before? I'll also merge my honors/activities with my education part.

I will edit my job description and shorten them. I'll also remove that useless line about computer/os.

Is it necessary to include a personal interests section? Will they actually care?

I will also make a separate header for Internships. My internships include the Democratic Party volunteer work and my internship with Box Solutions. The Phonathon was a campus job.

No offense, but I think Ken's advice applies more to people who've had a substantial career, not a year in an entry-level job. Your list of school honors is more impressive at first glance than your work experience.

I would also remove the software skills line. Photoshop and Office are common (Office is pretty much assumed these days) and the fundraiser one isn't particularly relevant.

The Personal Interests line isn't 100% required for law school admissions, but it is expected at the legal hiring stage, so you might as well get your resume in the proper form now. You should be more specific with the moves/reading/music items if you are going to include them. e.g. Spy novels, film noir, and classic rock. It's more interesting and less generic.

[hephaestus]

I second getting rid of the second skills line. No one will care if you can use those programs. I also think you can compress your descriptions further and change it to a larger font. It looks crowded and it doesn't seem to be for a very good reason (like substantial work experience).

[blink]

Thanks for the suggestions rinkrat, I will put my contact info back in.
Ken's guide said to put work experience before academic if you are no longer in school: "If you are no longer in school, work should come first." Should I put my academic stuff first, or should I keep the work experience before? I'll also merge my honors/activities with my education part.

I will edit my job description and shorten them. I'll also remove that useless line about computer/os.

Is it necessary to include a personal interests section? Will they actually care?

I will also make a separate header for Internships. My internships include the Democratic Party volunteer work and my internship with Box Solutions. The Phonathon was a campus job.

No offense, but I think Ken's advice applies more to people who've had a substantial career, not a year in an entry-level job. Your list of school honors is more impressive at first glance than your work experience.

I would also remove the software skills line. Photoshop and Office are common (Office is pretty much assumed these days) and the fundraiser one isn't particularly relevant.

The Personal Interests line isn't 100% required for law school admissions, but it is expected at the legal hiring stage, so you might as well get your resume in the proper form now. You should be more specific with the moves/reading/music items if you are going to include them. e.g. Spy novels, film noir, and classic rock. It's more interesting and less generic.

What about if the work experience is prestigious, yet only for a few years? Still put it below education?

[john1990]

You absolutely need contact info on a resume. Non-negotiable.

Put Education first. (This is an academic resume.)
Put Honors in the Education section.
Remove the computer/OS skills.
Add a personal interests line.

Your job descriptions are a little problematic. You've got multiple bullet points within each bullet point. Edit those down to 3-4 single-line bullet points per job.

Are the Phone-A-Thon and Democratic Party jobs volunteer? If so, put them in a separate section or make it clear that they are.

It is possible to fit six jobs and contact info on one page.

Here's my current resume, genericized and redacted. Red is stuff that has been added since starting law school. The resume I applied to law school with was basically the same design before cramming the new stuff in, except with more relaxed spacing. There may have been a third bullet point under the older jobs.

Expensive school of law lol

[rinkrat19]

Expensive school of law lol

Only the 4th most expensive. Lucky me.

[2x2Matrix]

Thanks for the suggestions rinkrat, I will put my contact info back in.
Ken's guide said to put work experience before academic if you are no longer in school: "If you are no longer in school, work should come first." Should I put my academic stuff first, or should I keep the work experience before? I'll also merge my honors/activities with my education part.

I will edit my job description and shorten them. I'll also remove that useless line about computer/os.

Is it necessary to include a personal interests section? Will they actually care?

I will also make a separate header for Internships. My internships include the Democratic Party volunteer work and my internship with Box Solutions. The Phonathon was a campus job.

No offense, but I think Ken's advice applies more to people who've had a substantial career, not a year in an entry-level job. Your list of school honors is more impressive at first glance than your work experience.

I would also remove the software skills line. Photoshop and Office are common (Office is pretty much assumed these days) and the fundraiser one isn't particularly relevant.

The Personal Interests line isn't 100% required for law school admissions, but it is expected at the legal hiring stage, so you might as well get your resume in the proper form now. You should be more specific with the moves/reading/music items if you are going to include them. e.g. Spy novels, film noir, and classic rock. It's more interesting and less generic.

What about if the work experience is prestigious, yet only for a few years? Still put it below education?

If it's banking/consulting/high tech, you can probably go either way and it won't make a difference