First attempt at DS. Harsh criticism appreciated. Forum

tuna_wasabi · Post by **tuna_wasabi** » Thu Jul 13, 2017 10:36 am

I'm considering using this as a PS, but for now it's a DS.

Willing to swap or review your draft PS too.

zkyggi · Post by **zkyggi** » Fri Jul 14, 2017 7:04 pm

Will do. Send it over.

Platopus · Post by **Platopus** » Sat Jul 22, 2017 10:34 pm

DowsingForAJD · Post by **DowsingForAJD** » Sat Jul 22, 2017 10:55 pm

I'm happy to trade too if you'd like another set of eyes.

rosieposie12 · Post by **rosieposie12** » Sat Jul 22, 2017 11:07 pm

Happy to trade, send it over!

tuna_wasabi · Post by **tuna_wasabi** » Mon Jul 24, 2017 11:22 am

rosieposie12 wrote:Happy to trade, send it over!

DowsingForAJD wrote:I'm happy to trade too if you'd like another set of eyes.

Platopus wrote:Happy to trade, send it over

zkyggi wrote:Will do. Send it over.

Thanks guys! I decided to start over since I wasn't too happy with my writing style--hope you would not mind if I send it 2-3 weeks from now

Feel free to PM me yours for feedback in the meantime