PS draft, any critiques and advices please!! Forum

[EmilyClark]

Guys please give me any advices on what i should fix and what kind of contruction i need to put in more, Thank you!!

When I was eight, my father told me to become a doctor. Seeing as my uncle who was a doctor is making large amount of money, and has gained a reputation for himself, I agreed. Soon everyone in my family had decided that I should become a doctor in the family, and I too, swayed by the prospect of high earning and stable career, had decided that I should be a doctor.
For years, I held on to that firm belief, it was inevitable that I would study biology, go to medical school, and become a skillful medical practitioner with a high income. However, this future was permanently halted when in college, I realized that the decision of becoming a doctor I made for myself is not of mine own, but out of peer pressure from my family. What I discovered was that what I truly wanted to do, was law.
I was like any other college student, taking courses that meets my core curriculum and major requirement. So when I decided to take the intro to psychology class, I was only doing it for my core curriculum. I never would have thought that taking an introductory course for psychology would trigger me to started thinking on my own terms.
After taking intro to psychology, I began to take more courses in relation to the study of behavior and mentality. My interest in psychology and social science started to manifest, I was deeply intrigued by the science behind human behavior and the human mind. However, my calling never came until I took a course on Criminology.
Deeply rooted from social science, criminology was fascinating. Immediately following the first class, I fell in love with this course. Learning about different views on crime, criminal types and patterns, and the social forces play in shaping criminal law, I developed an enthusiasm in researching things based on those subjects. I had never been so attentive in the class before then, never had I missed a lecture, and after the lecture I often looked for case files so that I may be able to relate real life examples to a term that I had learned in class. As I devoted my time toward the study of crime and criminal behavior, I also looked at solutions to prevent crime, or prosecute those criminals legally. As my infatuation with the subject of criminology continues, I have begun to realize that I am experiencing something I had never experienced in learning before: passion.
Back when I was following my parents’ dream to become a doctor, I went wherever they pointed me. I worked towards a goal that they decided for me. Though I agreed to become a doctor, I could not help but felt that I lacked the passion that I have seen in doctors as I educated myself in progression towards that profession; the same passion that appears to be accompanied with the study of criminology as I educate myself on more criminal theories and criminal laws.
With the discovery of this information, for the first time in my life I began a deep reflection. I thought about my family, who had wanted me to become a doctor. I thought about how disappointed they were going to be in me, had I not continued working towards that goal. However, I also thought about myself. If I become a doctor, like they wanted me to, I would have a life with high standard of living, never would I have to worry about losing a job. Such a prospect is the image of the American dream come true, but I cannot help but think that doing so would deprive me of my own happiness. Hence, I disregard my family’s wishes, and choose to study law.
Even though I know that they will be disappointed, and angry that I have brushed aside their dream of me becoming a doctor, deep down I know they will always love me. The future of myself as a lawyer, a legal officer, or a criminologist is much more attractive to me then becoming a doctor. I intend to show my family that I made the right decision to pursue a law degree, and that they should not be disappointed, but proud of me. Because I can, and I know I will, thrive in a legal career just as well as my uncle has as a great medical practitioner.

[Mr. Archer]

Do you have any other topics? Think about how many people make the doctor to lawyer path switch. It makes the general premise of your PS not very unique. The story you tell isn't interesting or good overall. Particularly, there's way too much focus on your family wanting you to be a doctor and what you think about it. The final sentence of the PS is as much about your uncle, who the reader won't care about at all, as it is about you, which is really bad. You should stay away from talking about how you want to go to law school but might be a legal officer or criminologist, instead of a lawyer.

[mjb447]

I agree with Mr. Archer - this PS topic doesn't cast you in a great light. It's good if you had a revelation that you'd be happier studying law than medicine, but it sounds like you made that decision fairly recently, and you're telling the admissions committee that you want to do something (criminologist or certain types of "legal officer") that law school may not prepare you for and that most students don't end up doing. (Also, fairly or unfairly, your story of an aspiring doctor becoming an aspiring lawyer might suggest that you weren't doing well in some of the tougher/less interesting pre-med classes, at least as compared to social sciences courses, which isn't a good way to get into a graduate school of any kind.)

[DrGlennRichie]

Scrap it altogether. All you are saying that your family wanted you to be a doctor for all the wrong reasons (money fame reputation). You were pushed into that and didnt have your voice until you were 20 something. Now you want to be a lawyer for reasons unknown. And you are still afraid of your family, but hoping that they will accept you since lawyers also can be rich fame and reputable. No, not good at all.