PS first draft plz take a look Forum

[Anonymous User]

This an early first draft. I am a very hardworking determined person and thats what my PS is about. I still have alot more to write.

"First they came for the Socialists, and I did not speak out—Because I was not a Socialist.Then they came for the Trade Unionists, and I did not speak out—Because I was not a Trade Unionist.Then they came for the Jews, and I did not speak out—Because I was not a Jew.Then they came for me—and there was no one left to speak for me." Before my father died he said to me these two words: "Never give up." From the day I was born I knew I wanted to be a lawyer. Everything in my life has led to this moment. Now its upto [Law school] to do everything it can to get me there. Few people change the world. I will be one of those people.

During my course at [Ivy Undergrad] I read many legal dissertations. Unlike many other incoming freshman I will already have a concept of the law in my mind. From there [Law school] will help me build upon that. I wont be there to make friends. Thats not why im there. There is a quote I keep dear to my heart "The fight for justice against corruption is never easy. It never has been and never will be. It exacts a toll on our self, our families, our friends, and especially our children. In the end, I believe, as in my case, the price we pay is well worth holding on to our dignity." Every waking moment I think about this wuote and what my duty is to the people.

As I continue down this road I travel on, I have taken the road less traveled. I am a Philanthropist, innovater, maverick. I look forward to accepting your innvotation to attend [Law school.]

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[cavalier1138]

I am a Philanthropist, innovater, maverick. I look forward to accepting your innvotation to attend [Law school.]

I vomited a little bit in my mouth at this point.

Seriously, this is a train-wreck of a personal statement. It achieves the exact opposite of what a good PS should achieve: through reading this, I didn't know anything substantive about you, but I knew that I hated you.

If this is what you think law schools want to see, you're wrong. If this is your genuine approach to life, then you need to learn to hide it better.

[R. Jeeves]

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[Babe-Loblaw]

This an early first draft. I am a very hardworking determined person and thats what my PS is about. I still have alot more to write.

"First they came for the Socialists, and I did not speak out—Because I was not a Socialist.Then they came for the Trade Unionists, and I did not speak out—Because I was not a Trade Unionist.Then they came for the Jews, and I did not speak out—Because I was not a Jew.Then they came for me—and there was no one left to speak for me." Before my father died he said to me these two words: "Never give up." From the day I was born I knew I wanted to be a lawyer. Everything in my life has led to this moment. Now its upto [Law school] to do everything it can to get me there. Few people change the world. I will be one of those people.

During my course at [Ivy Undergrad] I read many legal dissertations. Unlike many other incoming freshman I will already have a concept of the law in my mind. From there [Law school] will help me build upon that. I wont be there to make friends. Thats not why im there. There is a quote I keep dear to my heart "The fight for justice against corruption is never easy. It never has been and never will be. It exacts a toll on our self, our families, our friends, and especially our children. In the end, I believe, as in my case, the price we pay is well worth holding on to our dignity." Every waking moment I think about this wuote and what my duty is to the people.

As I continue down this road I travel on, I have taken the road less traveled. I am a Philanthropist, innovater, maverick. I look forward to accepting your innvotation to attend [Law school.]

+180 troll

[paytonalexandra]

I'm going to assume this is a joke