Hey guys, any help here is appreciated! I've been working on this PS for a while and am looking for some fresh eyes to help read over it. I'm working on redoing my conclusion currently as I try to wrap it pull in a "why law" section.
Edit: Appreciate the feedback, looks like its back to the drawing board.
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You may not want to pepper an essay about your strong interest in ethics with multiple examples of you committing ethical breaches.
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Lol. I definitely understand that being a concern, and will take that into consideration. The most "recent" one of these is now 7 years ago which would more or less be apparent via my resume. The goal is to express how being young (18-19) and having these experiences has made me into who I am now. Obviously if that isn't being express effectively I need to rethink / rework this.cavalier1138 wrote:You may not want to pepper an essay about your strong interest in ethics with multiple examples of you committing ethical breaches.
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I think it's a bit too big of a risk. 7 years is not that long, and things like fraud are pretty big red flags for admissions offices.
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Definitely agree that this is an ill-advised topic. Re: the situation with your professor, it seems you might have to address that due to C&F, but this is NOT the place to do it. Stick it in an addendum.
If it is the case that this is a C&F issue, it is a really bad idea to bring up another example of you doing something that is ethically questionable. Scrap the work anecdote.
If there were no C&F issues, I would say that the work situation could be used if done carefully. (Reading it, I wanted to know how old you were. You would need to do more work to distance yourself from the incident.) But ONLY if there were no C&F issues.
If it is the case that this is a C&F issue, it is a really bad idea to bring up another example of you doing something that is ethically questionable. Scrap the work anecdote.
If there were no C&F issues, I would say that the work situation could be used if done carefully. (Reading it, I wanted to know how old you were. You would need to do more work to distance yourself from the incident.) But ONLY if there were no C&F issues.
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I agree that this seems like too risky of a topic... & I'm a lot less convincible than some others on here about what topics should be avoided in PS for some reason lol.
Supporting what cavaliers said, I went to one of the LAWS forums and there was a question posed by someone about how to should address something such as breaking honor code during the application process and the deans on the panel basically said that breaking honor code is a HUGE issue to them because the law profession has a lot to do with ethics so it raises a flag. I'd imagine that the same would hold true to this as an essay topic.
With that warning out of the way, if you're super-determined to write about this, I think the jump from the unethical truck situation to the class cheating situation was awkward. I'm not sure of a good way to transition from one to the other, but I feel it lacks some sort of transition. I'm assuming you included the part about telling your professor what you'd done to show you have an "aha moment" when it came to ethical responsibility/behavior, but I think you should write MORE about how you grew from the situation. It's kind of like "I told my professor what I did but it was fine and then I got this ring that symbolizes a vow to uphold ethical standards" but doesn't really elaborate on what changed in you to make it so you can be expected to not have any future ethical issues.
Again, I agree with the others, I think you should avoid this topic because of the issue of ethics but thought I'd give you a little critique in case you decide to stick to it anyway.
Supporting what cavaliers said, I went to one of the LAWS forums and there was a question posed by someone about how to should address something such as breaking honor code during the application process and the deans on the panel basically said that breaking honor code is a HUGE issue to them because the law profession has a lot to do with ethics so it raises a flag. I'd imagine that the same would hold true to this as an essay topic.
With that warning out of the way, if you're super-determined to write about this, I think the jump from the unethical truck situation to the class cheating situation was awkward. I'm not sure of a good way to transition from one to the other, but I feel it lacks some sort of transition. I'm assuming you included the part about telling your professor what you'd done to show you have an "aha moment" when it came to ethical responsibility/behavior, but I think you should write MORE about how you grew from the situation. It's kind of like "I told my professor what I did but it was fine and then I got this ring that symbolizes a vow to uphold ethical standards" but doesn't really elaborate on what changed in you to make it so you can be expected to not have any future ethical issues.
Again, I agree with the others, I think you should avoid this topic because of the issue of ethics but thought I'd give you a little critique in case you decide to stick to it anyway.
