Low GPA Addendum, Please Critique Forum
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AlexandraHope
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Low GPA Addendum, Please Critique
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hbaker712
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Re: Low GPA Addendum, Please Critique
Looks pretty good to me. Nitpicking, I would make a couple changes.
1. In the 3rd sentence, I would say "consequently" rather than "in consequence."
2. In the same sentence, I would say "...spend as many days as possible with my grandfather during his final days." Addenda don't necessarily need the other language, in my opinion.
3. In the 4th sentence, I would just start with "This negatively impacted...."
4. In the 5th sentence, and I'm probably splitting hairs here, I would say "I also...."
Really, I think you get across exactly what you need to. Good luck!
*Please excuse any formatting or other errors as this was sent from my phone.
1. In the 3rd sentence, I would say "consequently" rather than "in consequence."
2. In the same sentence, I would say "...spend as many days as possible with my grandfather during his final days." Addenda don't necessarily need the other language, in my opinion.
3. In the 4th sentence, I would just start with "This negatively impacted...."
4. In the 5th sentence, and I'm probably splitting hairs here, I would say "I also...."
Really, I think you get across exactly what you need to. Good luck!
*Please excuse any formatting or other errors as this was sent from my phone.
