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TheKid21

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Burger King?

Post by TheKid21 » Sun Dec 20, 2015 5:03 pm

How's it going everyone? I'd like to get some feedback from some of you regarding my personal statement topic. As the title suggests, I worked at Burger King for a few summers. However, I did so in order to become more independent and branch out from my father's business. To make a long, story short, in my personal statement I explained how all of the employees were of Latin descent and of a lower socio-economic status. (which is true) Experiencing this environment, and how my co-workers lived pay-check to pay-check, has allowed me to see the world from another perspective, one that I have never seen first hand before my experience at Burger King. As a result, i have developed an interest in public defense and labor law.


What do some of you think of this topic? I also worked at my father's office in a managerial position that could demonstrate some of my positive qualities as well, but I feel like my Burger King experience is more unique. Any feedback would be much appreciated. Thanks.

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Re: Burger King?

Post by Hand » Sun Dec 20, 2015 5:11 pm

TheKid21 wrote:How's it going everyone? I'd like to get some feedback from some of you regarding my personal statement topic. As the title suggests, I worked at Burger King for a few summers. However, I did so in order to become more independent and branch out from my father's business. To make a long, story short, in my personal statement I explained how all of the employees were of Latin descent and of a lower socio-economic status. (which is true) Experiencing this environment, and how my co-workers lived pay-check to pay-check, has allowed me to see the world from another perspective, one that I have never seen first hand before my experience at Burger King. As a result, i have developed an interest in public defense and labor law.


What do some of you think of this topic? I also worked at my father's office in a managerial position that could demonstrate some of my positive qualities as well, but I feel like my Burger King experience is more unique. Any feedback would be much appreciated. Thanks.
Maybe you can post some excerpts, to give us more of a taste

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Re: Burger King?

Post by A. Nony Mouse » Sun Dec 20, 2015 5:13 pm

The main issue with the Burger King idea is that you don't want it to come across as if your co-workers exist to provide you with enlightenment about the poor/disadvantaged. It might be fine, but there's a risk of sounding naive/privileged/condescending.

And Hand, don't troll.

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Re: Burger King?

Post by TheKid21 » Sun Dec 20, 2015 6:22 pm

Thanks for your help A.Nony Mouse. You think I could send you a PM of my personal statement and let me know what you think? I could review something of yours in return if you'd like. All in all, obviously my intentions are not to be offensive, but I think having an objective perspective review my work could only help. What do you say?

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Re: Burger King?

Post by Harry_Pluxen » Sun Dec 20, 2015 6:40 pm

Maybe this could be a good idea for a diversity statement. Once knew someone who wrote on a similar topic.

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Re: Burger King?

Post by bretby » Sun Dec 20, 2015 6:47 pm

TheKid21 wrote:How's it going everyone? I'd like to get some feedback from some of you regarding my personal statement topic. As the title suggests, I worked at Burger King for a few summers. However, I did so in order to become more independent and branch out from my father's business. To make a long, story short, in my personal statement I explained how all of the employees were of Latin descent and of a lower socio-economic status. (which is true) Experiencing this environment, and how my co-workers lived pay-check to pay-check, has allowed me to see the world from another perspective, one that I have never seen first hand before my experience at Burger King. As a result, i have developed an interest in public defense and labor law.


What do some of you think of this topic? I also worked at my father's office in a managerial position that could demonstrate some of my positive qualities as well, but I feel like my Burger King experience is more unique. Any feedback would be much appreciated. Thanks.
This sounds like something that would be very difficult to pull off without, as Nony said, sounding completely out-of-touch.

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Re: Burger King?

Post by kingpin101 » Sun Dec 20, 2015 7:35 pm

God damnit, I've been studying so much civ pro that as soon as I saw the title I thought of personal jurisdiction.

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