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Re: PS draft - comments?

Post by Companion Cube » Thu Nov 12, 2015 1:57 pm

I worry about the topic.

tbf I only read it briskly but it feels like "here's some stuff I went through that was enjoyable but challenging. And here's one sentence saying that it would help me be a good lawyer."

There is no "why law", but a lot of "why I would be good at law." Maybe that's ok, idk

PS I think a good PS could be drafted from the experience but I would change the approach. Find a specific area of law that requires you apply similar skills and say that you want to do that because of this experience. Also work on making it sound less juvenile

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Re: PS draft - comments?

Post by cbbinnyc » Thu Nov 12, 2015 2:31 pm

The topic does have potential, I found it engaging. You could shorten the description of the camp and spend more time discussing the fundraising story, which is the strongest part because it shows you actively meeting a challenge.

Others may have differing opinions on this, but in my limited experience it seems that admissions people, while they aren't necessarily looking for an essay centered around "Why Law School?", want to see it at least addressed. Again, this my non-expert opinion, but I don't understand, after reading this essay, why you would want to pursue a law degree and kind of wish that came across.

ETA: You can tighten up the prose quite a bit, but, as it is a first draft, I assume you probably don't need the specifics on that at this point.

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