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Criticize My First Draft, please & thx

Post by brother » Tue Nov 10, 2015 10:32 pm

Thanks!
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Re: Criticize My First Draft, please & thx

Post by Theresa87 » Thu Nov 12, 2015 2:26 pm

Sounds good. I would delete the last paragraph though. It just doesn't fit and doesn't seem as genuine as the rest of the piece. And maybe add some more information about yourself as in making it sound less "resume-like" and more about your own great qualities
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