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Re: Juvenile Justice PS - Critique Needed

Post by Anonymous User » Fri Oct 23, 2015 3:05 pm

sanibella wrote:I always feel hesitant about using a child's story for your narrative, though I know many, many people will do it.

I would not use the word "pissed".
Do you feel like I am using his story for personal gain? That is certainly not my intention, and I do not want it to be perceived that way. Do you have suggestions for conveying the same sort of emotion/experience without using his story?

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Re: Juvenile Justice PS - Critique Needed

Post by cbbinnyc » Fri Oct 23, 2015 3:14 pm

Anonymous User wrote:
sanibella wrote:I always feel hesitant about using a child's story for your narrative, though I know many, many people will do it.

I would not use the word "pissed".
Do you feel like I am using his story for personal gain? That is certainly not my intention, and I do not want it to be perceived that way. Do you have suggestions for conveying the same sort of emotion/experience without using his story?
I don't see any problem with using this kid's story, though maybe don't use his name (even a fake name). I agree, don't use "pissed". It's fine to express emotion, but "pissed" is too colloquial.

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Re: Juvenile Justice PS - Critique Needed

Post by sanibella » Fri Oct 23, 2015 3:36 pm

Anonymous User wrote:
sanibella wrote:I always feel hesitant about using a child's story for your narrative, though I know many, many people will do it.

I would not use the word "pissed".
Do you feel like I am using his story for personal gain? That is certainly not my intention, and I do not want it to be perceived that way. Do you have suggestions for conveying the same sort of emotion/experience without using his story?
I don't think that is your intent, and I think your usage of his narrative is more sincere and sensitive than most. It is a personal feeling and I don't think most readers would agree with me.

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