ThankYou! Forum

[Anonymous User]

I wanted to thank everyone who helped me with my personal statement--both here and through personal messages. I feel it has improved substantially from when I began. I know personal statements are not thought of as critically important in admissions, but I appreciate the care and attention people here spend on helping others.

I spent the vast majority of my time in the LSAT Preparation forum, now as I expand to other areas of the site I am reminded how great this website is.

Top-Law-Schools plays the crucial role of reducing the information gap in law school admissions. That, in my opinion, is the way to create real, meaningful diversity in our law school classrooms. I know I wouldn't be in anywhere near the position I am in now if I had not joined these forums.

Thanks TLS.

[CanadianWolf]

Seems as though you have two concluding paragraphs to your otherwise well written PS. Consider deleting the final paragraph.

[Anonymous User]

That's interesting. The last paragraph I really drive home why law school, though. I think that's important.

Anyone else have thoughts?

[CanadianWolf]

The last paragraph reads like an introductory paragraph to a new & different writing.

[cbbinnyc]

I second Canadian's opinion. Get rid of the last paragraph. The rest is in good shape.

[jumbocolumbo]

You misspelled "arctic".

[Anonymous User]

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[Anonymous User]

PLEASE DO NOT QUOTE MY PS

Please see below--

[sd1111]

sorry for I quoted your PS. I just did not realize it is impolite, can anybody explain? Because OP may delete the PS and if I quote the PS then it would still be on this website?

[threatlevelmidnight]

I think the beginning is ok, but you lose me after the "it reminds me of" graf. The ending just doesn't work for me because it doesn't seem natural - you're using the entire PS to talk about how you as a paralegal wanted to do more and help and legal knowledge is insufficient, but then you revert back to your undergrad mock trial experience? I can understand why you're including these graf, you want to show your interest in the law. But there's a flow issue between your story and your ending. It seems very forced. I think you have something compelling with this story, but the ending can be reworked.

How has this incident since changed your work as a paralegal? Have there been other cases where you have reacted similarly? There are other ways to talk about your interest in law while keeping the flow of the PS. Good luck!

[Gray]

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[CanadianWolf]

The last two paragraphs seem as if they are part of a different writing.

[A. Nony Mouse]

I do not want to be rude, but are you sure this topic is the most attractive one you could use to form your PS? Lots of things in your PS are the things law school professors familiar with and have to teach students everyday. Do you really belive it would be interesting enough? Though your experience is good.

I don't think the point of a PS is to entertain, but to tell the reader something about the author. If this is what the author genuinely experienced and wants to talk about, that should be fine. Besides, isn't Yale the only school where profs read PSes?

Also, it's polite not to quote the PS (though OP, if you don't want it quoted, you should probably say that somewhere). Thanks.

(I agree about the last 2 paragraphs.)

[joeycxxxx09]

One thing I have learned is thatknowledge of the law is a necessary but insufficient condition to being an attorney.
Never a big fan of using LSAT terminology in a PS. It's cheesy. But otherwise good, except the last few paragraphs just seem different than the beginning

[Anonymous User]

I do not want to be rude, but are you sure this topic is the most attractive one you could use to form your PS? Lots of things in your PS are the things law school professors familiar with and have to teach students everyday. Do you really belive it would be interesting enough? Though your experience is good.

Can you please edit your post so you don't quote my PS. Thanks.

Everyone else thanks. I still have some work to do.

[Anonymous User]

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[CanadianWolf]

I only read the last few paragraphs. The final paragraph should be deleted.

[Anonymous User]

I only read the last few paragraphs. The final paragraph should be deleted.

Why?

[CanadianWolf]

In short, it's an odd ending. Seems like you're just trying to cram information into the writing without writing a concluding paragraph.

[sd1111]

I do not want to be rude, but are you sure this topic is the most attractive one you could use to form your PS? Lots of things in your PS are the things law school professors familiar with and have to teach students everyday. Do you really belive it would be interesting enough? Though your experience is good.

I don't think the point of a PS is to entertain, but to tell the reader something about the author. If this is what the author genuinely experienced and wants to talk about, that should be fine. Besides, isn't Yale the only school where profs read PSes?

Also, it's polite not to quote the PS (though OP, if you don't want it quoted, you should probably say that somewhere). Thanks.

(I agree about the last 2 paragraphs.)

When I say attractive/interesting, it does not mean entertain people. But thaks for your reminder.