Please help me! Forum

[pandapops]

Hello everyone! Long time lurker, first time poster. Would anyone be willing to take a look at my personal statement? I'm not confident enough in it yet to post it so please PM me if you're willing to help. Please be brutally honest, this is the third PS I've written so if you think I need to scrap it and start again, feel free to say so. This is pushing three pages so if you think I'm rambling somewhere let me know. Also I'm unsure of the topic I picked so if you could also let me know how well you think it works or if I should pick something else that would be fantastic!

[CanadianWolf]

I'll offer a brief critique if you PM it to me.

[pandapops]

anyone?