C&F Critique Needed Forum

[Anonymous User]

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[Widdle_Dumpling]

The second sentence in the last paragraph (As a military...of such behavior) is a little hard to read. As it is, it suggests that you understand the necessity of detrimental effects, which is not what you meant to say, I think. I'd suggest reworking it into two separate sentences, cutting out the parenthetical (-and required...for them-) and putting it somewhere else. If you keep the last part of that sentence, remove the "of" in front of "the detrimental effects."

Good luck!

[A. Nony Mouse]

I think he just needs to omit the second "of" and the sentence would be fine.

[CanadianWolf]

"Theft of services" & "false information" violations will probably trigger a request for more detailed information. Any such requests may ask for full details about all of your reported transgressions, therefore, you may want to stop a full inquiry by addressing the most serious infractions upfront.

[Anonymous User]

Thank you all - points well taken.

Unfortunately in 2014 my UG dumped my physical record containing details, and I'd only be guessing if I tried to remember what exactly happened. I guess I'll move that point up front to try to make it clear.