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C&F Addendum Draft

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Re: C&F Addendum Draft

Post by Widdle_Dumpling » Mon Sep 07, 2015 10:48 pm

(3) Interfere with Emergency Communications
Should it read interference with?

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Re: C&F Addendum Draft

Post by RaceJudicata » Mon Sep 07, 2015 10:55 pm

Maybe change "girlfriend of six months" go "long-term girlfriend" or just "significant other" ... six months aint that long - or at least not long enough to gain any sympathy

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Re: C&F Addendum Draft

Post by Anonymous User » Mon Sep 07, 2015 10:58 pm

Widdle_Dumpling wrote:(3) Interfere with Emergency Communications
Should it read interference with?
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RaceJudicata wrote:Maybe change "girlfriend of six months" go "long-term girlfriend" or just "significant other" ... six months aint that long - or at least not long enough to gain any sympathy
I'm not really trying to gain any sympathy, as I was the one to break up with her and she falsely accused me of these charges.

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Re: C&F Addendum Draft

Post by debdeb2 » Mon Sep 07, 2015 11:04 pm

The essay leaves me confused about the B&E charge. It kind of seems like you went over to her house, were invited in, had the break-up talk, and then there was a hot mess. If you did enter her premises w/o permission, I guess you don't need to own up to that here, but the way it is written now is a bit convoluted.

It might be more straightforward to start with the charges, and then in the second part of the essay indicate that you had been invited in, but that the break-up discussion did not go well.

This is a tricky one, because to be honest it kind of seems like your ex just went nuts, and there isn't a polite way to state that. Ex: Lesson learned that you will use the phone for future breakups? Appreciation for law enforcement handling of dramatic domestic scenes?

good luck -

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Re: C&F Addendum Draft

Post by Anonymous User » Mon Sep 07, 2015 11:21 pm

debdeb2 wrote:The essay leaves me confused about the B&E charge. It kind of seems like you went over to her house, were invited in, had the break-up talk, and then there was a hot mess. If you did enter her premises w/o permission, I guess you don't need to own up to that here, but the way it is written now is a bit convoluted.

It might be more straightforward to start with the charges, and then in the second part of the essay indicate that you had been invited in, but that the break-up discussion did not go well.

This is a tricky one, because to be honest it kind of seems like your ex just went nuts, and there isn't a polite way to state that. Ex: Lesson learned that you will use the phone for future breakups? Appreciation for law enforcement handling of dramatic domestic scenes?

good luck -
This is what I needed, thanks!!

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Re: C&F Addendum Draft

Post by stronitsing » Mon Sep 07, 2015 11:34 pm

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Re: C&F Addendum Draft

Post by Anonymous User » Tue Sep 08, 2015 7:43 am

Thanks for your help, stronitsing. Would you mind please deleting the quote and your edited version? Thanks!

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