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[Anonymous User]

Thanks for the advice and help.

[BasilHallward]

Coming from a nontraditional educational myself, I certainly appreciate your story. It has a lot of potential. PM for subject-matter critiquing. For now, I will say work on those writing mechanics. A lot of your clauses are disjointed

[Scalvert]

PM me for help with grammar/punctuation .

[debdeb2]

Hi - you've clearly had a difficult life - I can't imagine what it was like to go through all of that.

Nursing is quite different than law, and the differences are meaningful in both learning style and working style. Are you someone who enjoys lots of interpersonal interaction? Who prefers to be up and moving? Are you indifferent to reading/writing, or do you dislike spending time on those activities? Transitioning to law, your life would have significantly more reading, and more sitting down. Law school is a 3-year round of cramming a lot of information into your head. 10-hour days of reading original source texts and analyses of those texts, etc.

Nursing is a profession that is expanding now - with all of the Boomers retiring, jobs will continue to increase for years. Nurses often make excellent salaries and can achieve flexible schedules through seniority. Conversely, law is shrinking - there are fewer jobs, too many graduates, and the graduates who come out of law school are struggling to pay their loans - particularly those who go into public interest law, as you propose.

The quality of writing in this essay is not strong. It is heartfelt, and sincere, and could probably be cleaned up. But it is indicative of someone who will probably not thrive when their class grade is based on one blue book exam. If the economy were better for lawyers right now, I'd say clean up this essay and give a cycle a shot - but if your overall goal is to work with the disadvantaged, you are already positioned to do just that in your current career track, without taking on $200k in debt (not including the loss of income you'd experience while in law school, probably an additional $200k loss).

Are you sure law school is the right decision, and the right decision now? Is there a career track you could take with nursing that would give you similar satisfaction? Are you in a position to save money like crazy, become effectively income independent (or at least have retirement funds squared away), and then take on the challenge for becoming a mediator or a social worker? You sound like a fine candidate for the MSW degree, for example. That is something you could probably do part-time through evening/weekend classes, and they would be thrilled to have a nurse.

I recommend reading One L by Scott Turow, and looking at career tracks you are interested in. The BS in Nursing is a fine degree, and is flexible enough that it can be applied in a lot of areas of nonprofit work, administration, and even advocacy. If you do decide that law school makes sense for you, do what you can to gain scholarships - the public interest areas of law pay maybe half of what you could make now as a nurse. Best -d

[seespotrun]

I'm gonna comment one sentence at a time. Sentence 1: delete it bc it adds nothing--nobody cares that you're old

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Sentence 2: delete everything before "...I have"

Consider whether you want to include such a tired introduction

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Sentence 3: the name of the documentary and its subject add nothing. Delete.

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After reading sentence 3 again: delete sentence 2

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Sentence 4: fuck that comma in the butt. Set off the "despite . .." phrase with commas instead

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Sentence 5: fuck the first comma in the butt

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Delete everything before "I grew up with..."

I'm now going to give up on you bc your PS screams "I'll just let TLS edit it!"

[nexgenlaw]

That is not true!! I have edited and sent this to my schools writing center and made all of the corrections that were suggested. I appreciate the help but if you would prefer not to help me I understand but there is really no need to be rude! Thanks

Delete everything before "I grew up with..."

I'm now going to give up on you bc your PS screams "I'll just let TLS edit it!"

[seespotrun]

There is every need to be rude.

Your story is somewhat unique and could be compelling if told the right way, but it's lost in shitty punctuation and surplusage.

Btw, I did help you. You're welcome.