Can somebody read over my DS and PS ? Forum

Anonymous User · Post by **Anonymous User** » Wed Jul 29, 2015 10:32 am

Thanks

Scalvert · Post by **Scalvert** » Wed Jul 29, 2015 11:19 am

I will make some edits

Look in your PMs later this afternoon, I'll reply there.

Anonymous User · Post by **Anonymous User** » Wed Jul 29, 2015 11:27 am

Can you do that even if I am anonymous?

Scalvert · Post by **Scalvert** » Wed Jul 29, 2015 11:29 am

I hadn't noticed that TBH. lol

PM me first (with your real username) and I'll send it in a reply.

benwyatt · Post by **benwyatt** » Wed Jul 29, 2015 11:31 am

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Anonymous User · Post by **Anonymous User** » Wed Jul 29, 2015 11:40 am

Benwyatt- Thanks so much for your reply. I was actually worried about that, actually. If you have any ideas on how I can change or shift the direction that would be wonderful.

urbanist11 · Post by **urbanist11** » Wed Jul 29, 2015 11:51 am

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Scalvert · Post by **Scalvert** » Wed Jul 29, 2015 1:20 pm

I PM'd the DS as well.

I think the first part of it works. The second part (while important) isn't really "unique" at all, though. (My grandmother was a single-parent school teacher as well, and some of the things my mom has told me are very similar to your situation.) I reworded the last part to sound as if the focus was more on your entire background than just the economic situation.

I haven't really looked into the DS too much, so someone else may be able to be of more help.

benwyatt · Post by **benwyatt** » Wed Jul 29, 2015 1:46 pm

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