First Draft of PS. Thoughts? Forum

Indifference · Post by **Indifference** » Mon Dec 22, 2014 8:21 pm

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greensun108 · Post by **greensun108** » Mon Dec 22, 2014 11:00 pm

I don't know a lot about personal statements, but I thought this was great. You seem to have an excellent topic, and the essay has good structure and flow.

starry eyed · Post by **starry eyed** » Mon Dec 22, 2014 11:34 pm

it's too focused on your father and not enough on you. it reads more like a letter of recommendation for you father than your personal statement. just my 2 cents

Indifference · Post by **Indifference** » Mon Dec 22, 2014 11:57 pm

alaird21 wrote:it's too focused on your father and not enough on you. it reads more like a letter of recommendation for you father than your personal statement. just my 2 cents

This was the general feeling I had as well after re-reading it. I do like the general topic, however. Maybe I should cut back on some of his character info and/or link it more clearly to mine?

Indifference · Post by **Indifference** » Wed Dec 31, 2014 6:30 pm

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