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Critiques would be much appreciated

Post by ahn4264 » Fri Nov 14, 2014 2:49 pm

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Re: Critiques would be much appreciated

Post by Gefuehlsecht » Fri Nov 14, 2014 5:18 pm

I like it. However, I'd cut out the last paragraph completely. I think it's unnecessary and I believe the statement would benefit from a more lighthearted final sentence/paragraph, similar to your first one.
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Re: Critiques would be much appreciated

Post by mist4bison » Sun Nov 16, 2014 1:26 am

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Re: Critiques would be much appreciated

Post by ahn4264 » Thu Nov 27, 2014 2:27 pm

Thank you for your comments! I took your advice and I think it looks much better. Apps are all finally submitted. Now for the wait..
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