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Anonymous User
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Draft
Deleted. Thanks for feedback!
Last edited by Anonymous User on Mon Jun 09, 2014 4:42 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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03152016
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Re: Draft
Great so far. You're a strong writer with a compelling story.
I think it would be helpful to elaborate on the ideas in your last paragraph. Your PS is a mix of 'overcoming adversity' and 'why law?'; although you set these themes up nicely, they feel incomplete. Can you make it more clear how you found your 'landing of inner peace'? Can you expand on what it is you do at the nonprofit? And how will law better equip you to improve outcomes for youth?
I had a similar 'overcoming adversity'/'why law' PS. Feel free to PM me if you'd like to discuss.
I think it would be helpful to elaborate on the ideas in your last paragraph. Your PS is a mix of 'overcoming adversity' and 'why law?'; although you set these themes up nicely, they feel incomplete. Can you make it more clear how you found your 'landing of inner peace'? Can you expand on what it is you do at the nonprofit? And how will law better equip you to improve outcomes for youth?
I had a similar 'overcoming adversity'/'why law' PS. Feel free to PM me if you'd like to discuss.
