First draft...any help would be appreciated Forum

[wc345]

Hello. I finished my first draft, but it's (i think) way too long, and I edited it multiple times and am at a loss for what to do with it. Comparing it with online sample statements has left me even more dejected. If anyone would like to take a look at it or swap I would really appreciate it. I am very good at editing in terms of grammar and mechanics and would love to look at others' essays; as for me, I just can't seem to decide on good material/ a direction for the essay. I was about to pay for an online service before I found this forum...if anyone's interested please pm me. Thanks

[BillsFan9907]

Hello. I finished my first draft, but it's (i think) way too long, and I edited it multiple times and am at a loss for what to do with it. Comparing it with online sample statements has left me even more dejected. If anyone would like to take a look at it or swap I would really appreciate it. I am very good at editing in terms of grammar and mechanics and would love to look at others' essays; as for me, I just can't seem to decide on good material/ a direction for the essay. I was about to pay for an online service before I found this forum...if anyone's interested please email me at [email protected]. Thanks

I'd be happy to give it a look. PM it to me, and I'll throw it on a word Doc and get it back to you with the tracked changes.

[ellayo]

I'd be happy to look it over. I'd also advise you not to post a school (or personal) email to this very public forum. Send it to me in a pm and I'll get it back to you.

[residentemma]

PM me--I'd be happy to. Also have a friend who used to be an admissions officer at Penn, he might be able to help too