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Re: Very rough draft ps
Don't argue that the dog is responsible for your recovery. While it's arguably cute, it could elicit eye-rolls. Also, you were the agent of that change and it's commendable. If you want to write about this topic, write about how you've led yourself to a better life and what the impact has been.
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Re: Very rough draft ps
If I were an adcom reading this, it wouldn't do you any favors. I would change the subject completely. You've graduated (or are graduating from) college and the best experience you can talk about is how you adopted a wounded dog who helped you get through the troubles you had after your DUI? You aren't trying to entice some girl to go on a second date with you. You're trying to convince the admissions staff that you're someone they want at their law school.
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Re: Very rough draft ps
I agree with previous posters. I would talk about over coming the DUI and how the dog helped but I wouldnt spend so much of the essay on the adoption of the dog. I don't really come away with this knowing much about you other than you got a DUI and you like helping dogs.
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Re: Very rough draft ps
Thank you! I will be scratching this and starting over!
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