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Adversity/Diversity Essay.. Please critique/advise

Post by luuma » Fri Nov 08, 2013 4:26 pm

thanks
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Re: Adversity/Diversity Essay.. Please critique/advise

Post by lawschool2014hopeful » Fri Nov 08, 2013 5:02 pm

Everything you wrote is pretty solid, until we get to the ending, your conviction of law. Claims like how law encompass every aspect of our life, is generic, brief, and not compelling for why you want to go law school.
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Re: Adversity/Diversity Essay.. Please critique/advise

Post by luuma » Fri Nov 08, 2013 5:39 pm

How would you propose I better refine it without dwelling to deep into another topic?
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Re: Adversity/Diversity Essay.. Please critique/advise

Post by lawschool2014hopeful » Fri Nov 08, 2013 9:38 pm

luuma wrote:How would you propose I better refine it without dwelling to deep into another topic?
Simple, you do.
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