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Personal Statement - First Draft (Deleted)

Post by Anonymous User » Sat Oct 26, 2013 5:49 pm

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Re: Personal Statement - First Draft

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Re: Personal Statement - First Draft

Post by $alty » Wed Oct 30, 2013 11:49 am

this is generally a solid PS. imo -- your middle paragraphs are the best. also, sometimes your writing is a bit wordy. for example: "so I was surprised when a partner called me unexpectedly." surprised and unexpectedly aren't synonyms, but I think they're redundant in this sentence. lastly, and maybe some TLSers will disagree, i think your last paragraph is too explicit -- I wouldn't just drop the school name unless you have specific things to say about that school.
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