Religious Personal Statement - Please Critique Forum

[Anonymous User]

Thanks for all your comments!

[ALF]

Nice job, I enjoyed reading this. You have strong writing skills and this is definitely a unique and interesting topic. I do not think that the religion aspect of this is risky. You do not appear to be dogmatic, blind in your faith or judgmental. You are willing to study and contemplate religion at a complex level and are not afraid to doubt/question. Therefore I don't think the topic itself is a bad one.

I'm no expert but I do worry that, for a personal statement, you may not be answering enough of the questions that an admissions committee might be asking. Check out the questions below that come from TLS advice at http://www.top-law-schools.com/guide-to ... ments.html

1. Have you demonstrated intellectual excellence?
2. Have you had a tangible impact on individuals or groups?
3. Have you demonstrated good leadership skills? Are you a Pro-Active Starter?
4. Have you had real-world experience?
5. Can you look at an issue from multiple perspectives?
6. What will you bring to our school? What attributes make you unique?
7. What brings you to our school?

So far I think this piece touches on 1, 4, 5 and 6, but you may want to address these topics more directly rather than simply hoping that the committee will make assumptions for you.

p.s. I'm blowing my "anonymity," but if you have any thoughts on my PS on the "Athletics of Culture" post, I'd appreciate it! No one has responded yet

[Rollontheground]

Nice job, I enjoyed reading this. You have strong writing skills and this is definitely a unique and interesting topic. I do not think that the religion aspect of this is risky. You do not appear to be dogmatic, blind in your faith or judgmental. You are willing to study and contemplate religion at a complex level and are not afraid to doubt/question. Therefore I don't think the topic itself is a bad one.

I'm no expert but I do worry that, for a personal statement, you may not be answering enough of the questions that an admissions committee might be asking. Check out the questions below that come from TLS advice at http://www.top-law-schools.com/guide-to ... ments.html

1. Have you demonstrated intellectual excellence?
2. Have you had a tangible impact on individuals or groups?
3. Have you demonstrated good leadership skills? Are you a Pro-Active Starter?
4. Have you had real-world experience?
5. Can you look at an issue from multiple perspectives?
6. What will you bring to our school? What attributes make you unique?
7. What brings you to our school?

So far I think this piece touches on 1, 4, 5 and 6, but you may want to address these topics more directly rather than simply hoping that the committee will make assumptions for you.

p.s. I'm blowing my "anonymity," but if you have any thoughts on my PS on the "Athletics of Culture" post, I'd appreciate it! No one has responded yet

I'm sure you can easily take care of 2 and 3. Nice Statement.