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Re: My final PS - please critique!
Covers too much, and the topic is weird. I'd rather read about you coming to the US from Korea than about Post-It notes. It just seems like an odd/random topic and goes all over the place, which is not good.
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Re: My final PS - please critique!
I agree your PS seems to shift topics a little too much. Maybe drop the part about anxiety? I think you tie your creativity/artistic inclinations to your experience as an immigrant well, and adding your struggles with anxiety kind of goes off track. Alternatively, if you plan on writing a diversity statement, maybe you could write about being an immigrant there instead and keep the anxiety challenges in this essay.
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