Looking to submit tonight -- Read/critique PS? (Edited) Forum

[kferden]

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[kferden]

And then it'll go on about how that same inquisitiveness grew with me over the years, thirst for knowledge, application of that in my professional experience, pieces all coming together, etc.

[CorkBoard]

And then it'll go on about how that same inquisitiveness grew with me over the years, thirst for knowledge, application of that in my professional experience, pieces all coming together, etc.

Post the rest so we can help you better.

[kferden]

Just updated the original post with the full PS. If someone could give me some ideas of how to better polish it, that would be awesome!

[kferden]

Anybody? I really want submit either this or a version of this by tonight. I just kind of want some outside feedback so I can a grasp of where it's at. Thanks!

[usafgirl]

You don't really say why law. Your first paragraph leads off suggesting that you have decided to study law specifically but the last paragraph doesn't really address it. You speak to general characteristics of learning that could be applied to any subject matter--I suggest adding in at least a couple sentences at the end that speak to 'why law' specifically.

[kferden]

Updated original post with a different, more why law-specific penultimate paragraph and conclusion.