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[totgafk180]

hoo

[bluepenguin]

What is this supposed to be?

[totgafk180]

yep

[totgafk180]

no

[totgafk180]

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[bluepenguin]

First of all, it's huge. I can't think of too many schools that allow >1 page supplementary essays. What prompts are you responding to?

So far I find the first half a little over-technical and expository, the central transition a little confusing, the second half largely resume-recitation for reasons I don't understand, and your conclusion underdeveloped by your body.

That's not to be mean. I think there are some strong and interesting elements in there. I just don't know what you're trying to say with this.

[totgafk180]

no

[PickMe!]

Wait. What? An "adversity" statement?

[fltanglab]

Wait. What? An "adversity" statement?

Yeah this whole concept confused me too. Wtf is an adversity statement? The non-diverse applicant's stab at sympathy?

In any case it seems like this statement is becoming an extension of the PS and a sign of...poor writing! You can't condense what you have to say into a PS? That doesn't mean you can just tack on more later.

[totgafk180]

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[bluepenguin]

I was trying to do several things that I didn't do in my PS:
-detail my medical past (which I don't talk about in my PS as my PS is about new stuff after college)
-detail my undergrad years and awards (I had read that the admissions committees may not know what "so and so award" is unless one explains it in an addendum; so, I tried to explain them here)
-show how I did not let the past discourage me from having a future

The medical stuff could be pretty interesting as a diversity statement but it's not important (I mean that in the sense of you give a LOT of detail, and you needn't do so much).

RESUME. Put award on resume > put bullet points explaining award > problem solved.

Okay, well trim down the section on your medical history and put more focus on your reflection.



And yes, that's a fair summary.

[bluepenguin]

On another note, I didn't want to write about the typical:
-being made fun of by others (called Quasimodo, hunchback)
-being depressed/sad
-other hardships extraneous to the medical hardship (not knowing real father, brother passing away)
etc.

Is that what schools want to hear about?

It doesnt matter. You don't have to accomplish everything. Try to present a well-rounded, well-presented application that both demonstrates your qualifications and conveys a sense of yourself as an individual and how you will contribute to the law school you're applying to. How you get there is up to you, but brevity will serve you well.