Revised these 3 sentences at last minute, any flaws??

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Revised these 3 sentences at last minute, any flaws??

Post by Steve2207 » Fri Nov 23, 2012 1:29 pm

Taking a leap of faith, I decided to give my employer a months’ notice in order to pursue an associate degree in paralegal studies. The introductions into separate areas of the law left me both excited and curious to learn more. The same feelings that had urged me to engage in my educational aspirations were beginning to inspire me to embark on a journey to become a practicing attorney.

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Taking a leap of faith, I gave my employer a thirty day notice in order to pursue an associate degree in paralegal studies. From day one, I was both excited by the introductions into separate areas of the law, and curious to learn more. The same feelings that had urged me to engage in my educational aspirations began inspiring me to embark on a journey to become a practicing attorney.

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Re: Revised these 3 sentences at last minute, any flaws??

Post by Jsa725 » Fri Nov 23, 2012 1:43 pm

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Re: Revised these 3 sentences at last minute, any flaws??

Post by Steve2207 » Fri Nov 23, 2012 1:52 pm

thanks

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