Reallly rough draft Diversity statement north korea Forum

[Anonymous User]

So this is a pretty rough draft of my diversity statement and is also one that I think I may need to refocus. I'll put my own thoughts on the bottom after the DS and you guys can either validate my claims and add onto them or perhaps just say that they're ill founded and that the DS is sorta on the right track.

North or South? This is a surprisingly common question people ask me when I tell others I'm Korean. It's also a question that I don't know exactly how to answer. While I am an American citizen, my family background ties me to both places.
The Korean war happened more than fifty years ago but the impact it has left upon my grandparents will always be there; and its lessons, borne out of poverty and desperation, continue to be passed down to my parents and me. Three out of four of my grandparents are from South Korea however my grandmother on my father's side is not. During the war she fled to South Korea but in the chaos she lost the rest of her family who are either presumably still in North Korea or died in the conflict. Always a delicate subject, she would still want to tell me about her life and how war has changed it. Because of this, I was always conscious of the connections that I had with North Korea.
For me, North Korea is more than some object of intellectual intrigue that people can detachedly talk about. It is something that affects my family directly and I feel strongly passionate about changing the status quo in any way I can contribute. With the influence of the Korean community and the interactions with my grandmother and a few North Korean refugees who I have met, I believe my background gives me a unique perspective that helps bring forward a more personal discussion on matters relating to international human rights and other related subjects thus making me a good addition to the student body and xxx law school in general.


My concerns are whether this seems to focus too much on my grandmother and not me in terms of why I would have a unique background. Also there are other concerns regarding diction and phrasing but these are superficial for me. The primary concern is whether my thesis itself, namely that my family's connection to North Korea and thus my interest, is a good one.

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Have you actually done work with North Korean refugees/international human rights?

[Anonymous User]

Have you actually done work with North Korean refugees/international human rights?

not with north koreans specifically but I have worked as an intern at an international human rights organization but it was a study abroad trip and only lasted one month

however my employment history points to work in the public sector helping constituents of certain representatives with their problems, whatever they may be. I'm not sure if that counts.

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I mean I kinda feel like it doesn't work as a DS in the sense that there's nothing really "diverse" about your situation. Maybe if you were the refugee, or did work involving the refugees directly, etc. But it's just my opinion.

[Ramsey]

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