Does something like this sound horrible? Sentence is leading up to the conclusion.
"I am not pursing a legal degree to save world from faulty court cases but"..... and then explains.
Honest and serious opinions please.
Need quick advice on a statement. Forum
- eyescream
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Re: Need quick advice on a statement.
It looks fine, but it's really hard to say without the rest of the statement.
- kylemba
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Re: Need quick advice on a statement.
Whole statement says:
"While I am not pursing a legal degree to save to world from faulty court cases, I am pursuing this degree so that one day I can represent the people who are helpless in the legal system as my father was."
Structure of the essays is:
1. Explains fathers court case that ruled against him based on assumption.
2. Explains how because of this the lives of me and my family had been changed.
3. Explains why I want to go to law school because of this event.
"While I am not pursing a legal degree to save to world from faulty court cases, I am pursuing this degree so that one day I can represent the people who are helpless in the legal system as my father was."
Structure of the essays is:
1. Explains fathers court case that ruled against him based on assumption.
2. Explains how because of this the lives of me and my family had been changed.
3. Explains why I want to go to law school because of this event.