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Draft, Needs lots and lots of help. Lots.... Forum
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zabava

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Draft, Needs lots and lots of help. Lots....
Hi guys, so I spent a ridiculously long time "writing" in order to produce this - see below. Please tear apart, I welcome all and any suggestions! I will gladly use my (albeit clearly stumped) editing skills to help you with yours!
PM me if you'd like to help
PM me if you'd like to help
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Re: Draft, Needs lots and lots of help. Lots....
Too long. Needs paragraph breaks.
I'd cut the academic portion out of this PS and not consider your desire to do more a flaw. Your immigration story would probably be more compelling to a reader than the story of your studying in UG.
I'd cut the academic portion out of this PS and not consider your desire to do more a flaw. Your immigration story would probably be more compelling to a reader than the story of your studying in UG.
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zabava

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Re: Draft, Needs lots and lots of help. Lots....
Thank you lots! 