Need help editing a single sentence, anyone? Forum

[Neatrends]

Trying to submit in the next half hour, unsure about the wording of a single sentence in my essay:

One of the moments that stands out most in my mind from these experiences was when (blah said)

or

One of the moments that stands out most in my mind from these experiences is when (blah said)

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[062914123]

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[Total Litigator]

Try something shorter....

[nsbane]

Both options are a whole string of words that delays the reader from getting to the point.

By the way I'm pretty sure both would work. i think in spoken language we would say was.

[nsbane]

Trying to submit in the next half hour, unsure about the wording of a single sentence in my essay:

One of the moments that stands out most in my mind from these experiences was when (blah said)

or

One of the moments that stands out most in my mind from these experiences is when (blah said)

?

IMHO:

In my mind, the most memorable moment was __________.

Don't over-complicate.

[062914123]

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[Indifferent]

Your sentence has no subject and ambiguously implies that you are offering to help someone edit a sentence rather than conveys that you are asking for help.

"The most memorable moment was" is TCR.

[062914123]

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[Neatrends]

Your sentence has no subject and ambiguously implies that you are offering to help someone edit a sentence rather than conveys that you are asking for help.

"The most memorable moment was" is TCR.

Touche!

I think I will shorten it and stick to "was." Thanks for the input guys.

[kublaikahn]

I remember most ...