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Here I go again!! :) Any opinions, comments welcomed!

Post by ugobabe86 » Thu Feb 09, 2012 12:21 am

Revising
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Re: Here I go again!! :) Any opinions, comments welcomed!

Post by richalvarez » Thu Feb 09, 2012 2:53 pm

I'm sorry to say this, but this is actually worse than your original post. Grammar errors aside, I feel like this PS deviates more from you as a person than your original one. The point of this paper is to show the reader who you are, what you will bring to law school, what qualities/traits will make you successful. 90% of this PS is a story about Brianna--who may be a dear soul, but she's not applying to law school. Shorten the story about her and tell me more about you! Convince me you should be a lawyer; if you can't be persuasive about something you want badly, then you might want to consider a career change. I don't say this to offend you, but to show you what you bring to the table. Best of luck. Keep writing, keep posting, and if you really want it that bad it will show.

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