Diversity Statement Creativity Forum

[mikel5400]

I'm writing a diversity statement about childhood financial hardship.

Can I write creatively (give vivid detail about what I witnessed and what happened and conclude by explaining how this made me a stronger person, detailing some lessons and takeaways)? My draft of this a little over a page double spaced.

Should I just have a paragraph of what happened when without creativity and detailed writing and put my lessons learned in a second paragraph? This would be half a page or so double spaced.

Thanks.

[Master Tofu]

What's the creative twist? I'm not understanding.

[mikel5400]

Should I just spit out the facts and say what I've learned? Should I start with a paragraph describing how my house may seem like an ordinary middle class neighborhood house from the outside, but on the inside, I've been exposed to financial hardships. I can detail a vivid description I have about a car being repossessed which is when I first became aware of financial difficulties? Or I could just say what happened and make it less creative and descriptive?

[Master Tofu]

No, the whole "things are different than they appear" schpill is not creative. Actually rather cliche. Just lay out what you want to say and be thoughtful.

[mikel5400]

For example, rather than just say my parents struggled financially, especially at one point during my childhood, I was wondering if I should be "creative" with my writing and start with something like:

From a distance my house appears like any other in the neighborhood. But as you get closer you notice it’s the only house with old cracked windows. The law needs to be mowed, and chips are a couple of shingles are missing. Sure these are just minor aesthetic differences, but they hint at much deeper issues that have influenced my outlook on life.

Then I get into realizing the financial issues, debt collectors, when this happened, and what I've learned from this.

[fashiongirl]

Check out this thread..
http://www.top-law-schools.com/forums/v ... 14&t=25821

[mikel5400]

Thank you so much. What do you think of a first paragraph like that.

[fashiongirl]

For example, rather than just say my parents struggled financially, especially at one point during my childhood, I was wondering if I should be "creative" with my writing and start with something like:

From a distance my house appears like any other in the neighborhood. But as you get closer you notice it’s the only house with old cracked windows. The law needs to be mowed, and chips are a couple of shingles are missing. Sure these are just minor aesthetic differences, but they hint at much deeper issues that have influenced my outlook on life.

Then I get into realizing the financial issues, debt collectors, when this happened, and what I've learned from this.

I think it's okay but maybe you can shorten it a bit and make it more to the point.