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PS Draft/Swap Forum
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89vision
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PS Draft/Swap
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CanadianWolf
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Re: PS Draft/Swap
"I was left to wonder what happened to the vagabond...."
I think that you miss the point of your own essay.
I think that you miss the point of your own essay.
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89vision
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Re: PS Draft/Swap
Would you mind clarifying?
My adviser said I needed to link the incident with why I wanted to attend law school, and how having a JD would have helped me help others. Is there a better way to do this, in your view? The older draft was more about experiencing an injustice, but it was disjointed.
Thanks!
My adviser said I needed to link the incident with why I wanted to attend law school, and how having a JD would have helped me help others. Is there a better way to do this, in your view? The older draft was more about experiencing an injustice, but it was disjointed.
Thanks!
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CanadianWolf
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Re: PS Draft/Swap
Referring to a human being as "the vagabond" is degrading and insensitive & conflicts with the goal of your PS to portray yourself as compassionate toward less fortunate individuals.
