PS Draft/Swap Forum

[89vision]

Please be nice.

I'll read yours if you send it my way.

[CanadianWolf]

"I was left to wonder what happened to the vagabond...."


I think that you miss the point of your own essay.

[89vision]

Would you mind clarifying?

My adviser said I needed to link the incident with why I wanted to attend law school, and how having a JD would have helped me help others. Is there a better way to do this, in your view? The older draft was more about experiencing an injustice, but it was disjointed.

Thanks!

[CanadianWolf]

Referring to a human being as "the vagabond" is degrading and insensitive & conflicts with the goal of your PS to portray yourself as compassionate toward less fortunate individuals.