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[lakers3peat]

ARRRRG

[Trex]

You write well and clearly have done many things that make you a well qualified candidate for law school. If I were you, however, I would pick one thing and write your personal statement on it. Otherwise, it sounds too much like a resume. I like the computer writing thing the most, it's unique.

Also, if you can check out mine, it would be super appreciated. http://www.top-law-schools.com/forums/v ... 8&t=171284

[msblaw89]

are there any events from college you can either tie in or substitute for high school events?

[Trex]

If it's possible, I think OP would benefit from taking his computer story and following through with how this passion progressed into the college years. I don't know if this applies of course, but just my .02

[msblaw89]

I just would assume that your statement would be stronger if you discuss events/accomplishments etc. from your more recent college experiences. I fell like your statement is sort of undermined by everything being related to high school. If you can somehow bridge your experiences in high school to college that could work, like Trex said.

[theaether]

i'd say the first half of the second paragraph can all be deleted and not much would be lost.

in the third paragraph, we don't see how you conquered your "fear of rejection." we just see that a) you decided to do something b) you did it.

yeah it seems a little scattered in terms of how many issues you're bringing to the table, i agree with the above to take the computer passion idea and run with it, see where it takes you

[jamesireland]

Maybe this will help: http://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC1311997/

[theadvancededit]

Maybe this will help: http://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC1311997/

Hahaha, that never gets old.