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by rinkrat19 » Tue Nov 01, 2011 3:21 pm
"providing for all expenses" makes it sound like you were supporting your parents as well. I assume, after re-reading, that you were just unexpectedly forced to pay your own way through school. It's an interesting story, but supporting yourself through college in no way makes you diverse. Tons of people at every college do it every year. Maybe you could make it a riches-to-rags kind of story and argue that the transition from one economic situation to the other makes you diverse, but it's still not very sympathetic. ("Aw, poor little rich kid discovers how the middle-class lives.") It's not like you were ever actually poor.
The second half of your second paragraph is really confusing. I don't understand what "prepared for my undergraduate" means, or what campus and community activities have to do with anything. Did you work and save up enough to pay for school before going so that you would have time to join clubs, etc.? Also, "completing my degrees without a financial standstill" (what?) has nothing to do with "committing to a determined course of study," so what are they doing in the same sentence?