One more edit on my PS. Please help Forum

[Scubasteve1315]

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[Scubasteve1315]

Would someone please be willing to give me feedback on this piece please? I just want to know whether I have the right idea.

I am willing to swap with someone and return the favor.

Thanks!

[SoltiBichon]

There are a bunch of incorrect comma usages in your essay. Also, the topic seems strange. You're describing how teaching was such a wonderful experience essay, so you're applying to law school. There's a jump in there in logic that is difficult to follow. It also seems disjointed, as if there's not really a centralized point.

Sorry if this sounds a bit harsh, but that's my two cents. Would be happy to offer my opinion if you have more specific questions about the essay, good luck!

[Strange]

Content has potential, but writing style needs a lot of work. Does not flow nicely. You will have to work hard on this one.

[Scubasteve1315]

Thanks guys, I will go back to work on it. What about focusing more on the juggling act of full-time work and full-time school? Add a family into the mix, and I think I can show much about my determination and ability to do well with a slightly difficult situation?

I think I will re-write the majority of this.

Again, thanks.

[SoltiBichon]

Yeah, no problem. I would try to think about what makes me stand out from other applicants, and write an essay focused on that. A lot of people work and go to school. You can make it work, but you need to write it really well. There's an article on TLS that helped me a bit in forming my ideas, if you haven't seen it already: http://www.top-law-schools.com/statement.html