Is anybody willing to look at my PS for me? Forum
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Scubasteve1315
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Is anybody willing to look at my PS for me?
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Justdoingmybest
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Re: Is anybody willing to look at my PS for me?
This needs more work
--Organization. You need to work on telling your story in a structured way that makes it easier for the reader to follow. Aspects of your PS seem all over the place.
--Topic. I feel you need to refine or focus your topic. I do not think what you have now is strong enough to support the fact that you want to study pharmacy law.
--syntax and grammar. Read your PS out loud as see where it sounds awkward and lacks clarity. This will help with editing.
Good luck.
--Organization. You need to work on telling your story in a structured way that makes it easier for the reader to follow. Aspects of your PS seem all over the place.
--Topic. I feel you need to refine or focus your topic. I do not think what you have now is strong enough to support the fact that you want to study pharmacy law.
--syntax and grammar. Read your PS out loud as see where it sounds awkward and lacks clarity. This will help with editing.
Good luck.
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Scubasteve1315
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Re: Is anybody willing to look at my PS for me?
Thank you for the feedback. I can see where some editing can greatly help. I can see where you got that I was interested in Pharm Law from reading it, but I actually am not that interested in medicine and law at all. I just included the interest in Pharm law in those courses to show where some of my beginning exposure to the law came in.
Again, I appreciate your help!
Again, I appreciate your help!
