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let's start with some tough love.personal statement.2nd edit

Post by paulkemp » Fri Oct 28, 2011 1:04 pm

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Re: let's start with some tough love.personal statement.2nd edit

Post by Hopefully2012 » Fri Oct 28, 2011 3:15 pm

I'm currently at work so I could only do a cursory review of your statement but you should take out the second to last paragraph completely--all it does is rehash your resume, which you should absolutely avoid doing in a law school PS.

Also, in the first sentence of your 5th paragraph: "the hard work ethic"

You also need a stronger conclusion. This PS needs some work before it's ready.

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