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NiccoloA

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Addendum critique

Post by NiccoloA » Tue Oct 25, 2011 9:45 am

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Re: Addendum critique

Post by theadvancededit » Tue Oct 25, 2011 1:20 pm

That paragraph works fine. I would remove maybe the mention of future clients (seems a bit much) and add that this has not been a problem since and will not be one in the future.
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Re: Addendum critique

Post by NiccoloA » Tue Oct 25, 2011 1:50 pm

theadvancededit wrote:That paragraph works fine. I would remove maybe the mention of future clients (seems a bit much) and add that this has not been a problem since and will not be one in the future.
Thanks, mate.

That was my big "eh... I don't know about this one."
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Re: Addendum critique

Post by bmore » Tue Oct 25, 2011 1:58 pm

Suspensions don't come from inexperience. I would use another word. Maybe just "immaturity". I don't really like this addedum. Greater responsibility for yourself? Really it would be for all of us out there.
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