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[OhioRider22]

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you are going for the "i was this back then now i am better" PS. you spend way too much time talking about your negative past and not enough about your better situation. your proof of you better situation now is listing your resume basically. you need to take out some parts about your past and put in more about your present and future goals and somehow tie it into why you want to go to law school. it is risky enough talking about your drugs and arrests, that sort of stuff should usually be put into addenda and not highlighted in a PS where it is all about your positive factors.

[OhioRider22]

Definitely some good points, thank you, I appreciate it. Like I said, I'd rather not have to write about any of this at all, but I feel like I need to address it somewhere. Maybe an addenda is my best bet. Also, you're right on about talking too much about the negative past, and not enough about the future. There are some definite reasons I want to practice law, and I should probably specifically include those. This rough draft was getting rather lengthy, and I kind of just cut it off. Thanks a lot for your feedback.

[Jack Smirks]

This is a good story but it's poorly written. PM it to me or repost it in the actual paragraph form and I'll try to edit it for you.

[OhioRider22]

Will do. Thanks.