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[supermannn]

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[supermannn]

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[LSATclincher]

I thought you had some neat experiences. I didn't like the blatant political references in the beginning though. I'd cut all that out. I'd also clear this sentence up:

"Through repeated display of steadfast loyalty to environmental conservation laws, I was quickly known as “the Conservationist” amongst the staff, anchoring a subdued duel meaning to label my equally-fervent loyalty to certain conservative ideals during jovial political discussions over lunch."

I thought the 3rd para of your experience read like a resume. What did you learn/accomplish? Also, cut out the random name drop of the law school in the final para. Overall, I did learn some stuff about you in the PS. I think it needs a few more tweaks.

[supermannn]

thanks LSATclincher; now that I look at it, I definitely see all of your points. I will be taking out the second paragraph as well as making some tweaks here and there. Thanks for advice; really, this site is awesome!