critique my ps? thanks Forum

[mediation_86]

pm me if you wanna look over it. thanks

[ixwad]

Right off the bat, "three guys with hostility" sounded a bit awkward to me. Also, "I never seen"

[Adjudicator]

What's a boba shop? Am I the only one who doesn't know?

[mediation_86]

What's a boba shop? Am I the only one who doesn't know?

boba is those black-brownish balls, usually in drinks such as smoothies or tea. you can most likely find them at your local drink store, or also known as boba shop.

hah, you may be one of a few who may not know what a boba shop is, im not sure though

anyways, how is the ps?

[DukeCornell]

I disagree with the initial assertion.

[ixwad]

Never heard of a boba shop either.

[ach24]

.

[sandaltan]

$100 op is asian or went to a uc school.

[sandaltan]

$100 op is asian or went to a uc school.

confirmed after reading (no racist).

[weejonbu]

What's a boba shop? Am I the only one who doesn't know?

boba is those black-brownish balls, usually in drinks such as smoothies or tea. you can most likely find them at your local drink store, or also known as boba shop.

hah, you may be one of a few who may not know what a boba shop is, im not sure though

anyways, how is the ps?

Still do not know what a boba shop is with this explanation.

This surprises me. Despite my username, I am far from being Asian (I'm actually from the good ol' South). Still, I think my Asian friends would find it amusing that so many people (on this forum at least) don't even know what boba tea (also known as bubble tea) is...



Never tried one of these? Delish.

[sandaltan]

What's a boba shop? Am I the only one who doesn't know?

boba is those black-brownish balls, usually in drinks such as smoothies or tea. you can most likely find them at your local drink store, or also known as boba shop.

hah, you may be one of a few who may not know what a boba shop is, im not sure though

anyways, how is the ps?

Still do not know what a boba shop is with this explanation.

This surprises me. Despite my username, I am far from being Asian (I'm actually from the good ol' South). Still, I think my Asian friends would find it amusing that so many people (on this forum at least) don't even know what boba tea (also known as bubble tea) is...



Never tried one of these? Delish.

if you dig slimy balls of cholesterol shooting through your straw on occasion they hell ya.

[moneko]

$100 op is asian or went to a uc school.

lol amazing powers of deduction. especially after reading a ps centered around the op being vietnamese

to op: get read of all of the 'some guy' and 'that guy' type references. get rid of 'guy' in general, you want to make everything in your ps way more formal. otherwise, i like the subject matter, just polish up your language.

[sandaltan]

$100 op is asian or went to a uc school.

lol amazing powers of deduction. especially after reading a ps centered around the op being vietnamese

to op: get read of all of the 'some guy' and 'that guy' type references. get rid of 'guy' in general, you want to make everything in your ps way more formal. otherwise, i like the subject matter, just polish up your language.

i think you read the ps even less than i did if you think it was centered around the op being vietnamese...

boba=asian.

[sparty99]

I am not Asian, but I lived in Asia for four months. I am familiar with bubble tea, but have NEVER used or heard of the terminology, boba shop.

I think your opening paragraph is not very interesting and it seems that you tell the story just to "tell a story." I would get rid of it.

It also sounds like you are going to law school because you want your parents to feel proud of you. This seems like a naive reason considering you will spend 3 years and $150,000 just so your parents are proud of you.