2 Personal Statements- Please offer your criticisms Forum

[bluewillow]

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[CanadianWolf]

CHANGE: "Such requests were granted..." to "My request was granted..." in the second essay.


Although there are other minor adjustments that can be made to further strengthen your second essay, overall it is very good & should be qite effective at helping your law school applications.

[bluewillow]

Thank you, CanadianWolf! I assume you think the second one is better.

[CanadianWolf]

I liked both, but am distracted by the recently diagnosed severe health problem (lung cancer) of one of my dogs that makes it difficult for me to concentrate for more than a few minutes at a time.

[bluewillow]

Oh no! I'm very sorry to hear that. My thought goes out to you and your dog. I have dogs myself and would be devastated if something happened to them. Thank you for even taking your time to comment.. I hope your dog gets better.

:edited: my parents are veterinarians themselves so if there's anything please let me know.. or just vent