P.S. Option Two - Need TLS Wisdom Forum

weejonbu · Post by **weejonbu** » Wed Nov 24, 2010 1:45 pm

A) Starting with a quote is EXTREMELY cliche

B) Reads too much like a resume

ApolloniusCanon · Post by **ApolloniusCanon** » Wed Nov 24, 2010 2:27 pm

TY, anyone else?

ads222 · Post by **ads222** » Wed Nov 24, 2010 5:18 pm

I'd scrap the essay. Aside from starting with a quote and rehashing your resume, the essay jumps around a lot among a lot of mini-focuses, and they're (at best) tenuously linked by this idea of persistence...which kind of seems cliche too. I think you're best off starting again, maybe taking one single idea from this PS if you still feel some attachment to it, and re-working it into something cohesive and something new for the adcomms to learn about you.

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