PS- close to submit - need feedback Forum

[Saltqjibo]

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[firemed]

Good and interesting. But... one sentence stands out as making me think "shouldn't he just stick with physical labor, then?"

and to love and understand the bare honesty of physical labor.

I would take that out. Very good job overall though, IMO.

[CanadianWolf]

This is a very good essay with some weak word choices. For example, did planting really "give" you the ability to work long hours ? Or did it "demand" it ?
"...constant exertion of body & mind." Exertion of body is clear, but mind is not.
ADD: "daily" to "can burn as many calories daily...".
A "total" disconnect from society when only a 100 miles to the nearest town ? Find a better word than "total".
"Discovering" new subjects & cities or "exploring" ?

"Local and academic communities" not "community" unless they were one & the same.
ADD a comma after "passive".

"...through varied weather" ? Don't you mean through "difficult times" ?
Last sentence: "feel" ? Or "judge ourselves" ?

The 7th of the 8 paragraphs is the weakest starting with: "...a depth of engagement and knowledge." = this is weak. The next two sentences ruin the rhythm of your essay. They disrupt the mood.

"...to love and understand the bare honesty of physical labor." is your best line, in my opinion.

[Saltqjibo]

"...to love and understand the bare honesty of physical labor." is your best line, in my opinion.

I like that line too, it must be a canadian thing.

I see what you mean about the jarring word choices, and I know that the second last paragraph needs some work. Comments were very helpful.

Anyone else want to take a stab.

I'm thinking of submitting a few less important apps tonight with this PS more or less as is just to get them out of the way. Am I there yet?