- Things I am most uncomfortable with or want to omit/change are in red. Jason Stillborn waits in a dimly lit room with nothing in it except a metal desk and two chairs, one on which he sits. There is a single door, reinforced by steel and protected by multiple locks, each on its own able to withstand a major blast. There are no windows, but Jason Stillborn knows that he is being watched very carefully – a camera is hidden on the left side of the wall. After waiting a few minutes, he smiles and looks directly at the lens, asking politely if he can have a cigarette. He is so calm that one could easily presume that he is talking to his best friend. No one would imagine that this man was arrested tonight after being convicted for the murder of twenty five individuals committed over the past eight weeks. No one would imagine that this man is as dangerous as he is brilliant. But most importantly, no one would imagine that by the end of the night, this man would walk free.
This might sound like a scene from a movie, but I assure you that it is not. Well, at least not yet. This is the beginning of my screenplay, and Jason Stillborn is my creation (or antagonist). He is a medical doctor who has engineered a disease that has the power to kill a single individual without it becoming contagious. This gives him the ability to kill only those he wants to kill, almost eliminating the risk of being caught. Eventually, however, as anyone who has performed a task of ingenuity can attest, he desires credit from someone somewhere in the world, leaving a trail that leads to capture.
In my laboratory, I transformed bacteria and engineered virus to study its functions, witnessing powerful advancements in biotechnology. Such innovations have been applied to provide much good throughout the world: new treatments for AIDS, therapies for cancer, and even developments for engine fuel. However, as with any new power, there is the potential for biotechnology to be used to cause terror or destruction. With the right tools, a disease can be created in a lab to be as deadly as HIV yet as contagious as the common cold. Since the day I graduated, I have used my science education to write a screenplay that illustrates the powers and dangers of biotechnology while also providing an exciting, suspenseful adventure for the audience.
As much thrill script-writing may provide, I am not looking for a career in entertainment. I simply enjoy screenwriting, spending any free time seeking to tell a story that stirs anticipation and provokes thought. I would prefer using my knowledge and experience in science to help resolve the problems that biology laboratories are currently facing. Bioscience is advancing very quickly, and while studying biology, I have come across questions that need answers. For example, with new research such as stem cells, a patient can use his own cells to help create a new organ for a transplant, completely avoiding the risk of rejection. This will undoubtedly save thousands of lives who have been waiting years, if not decades, on a transplant list. Such lists will one day only be found in history books or medical records due to the results of stem cell research. Nevertheless, some questions still remain. Who owns the rights to such technology? Is it the researchers who discovered such a method, the institution that funded such research, or does it belong completely to the public who ultimately funded the institution? Without a firm foundation in the biological sciences, it may be difficult or perhaps impossible to find the right answer. I want to take a part in finding such answers to ultimately benefit people in need.
Many people tell me that with my degree I am limited to either a career in medicine or research. And though there was a time when I felt the same way, I know now that I am not. As partially evidenced by my screenplay, I hope to use my knowledge of science to venture into new fields and industries that will (or could – I prefer could because it is more accurate. I prefer will because it is more compelling but sounds a bit arrogant and self-elevating) benefit from such expertise. Although there may be days where I will miss working in a laboratory to help make any new discoveries, I am still as excited, if not more excited, for my future beyond it.
but fortunately - i fixed most, if not all, the corrections that you suggested. also - the last part about handing it to someone, the only people that ultimately matter when reading this will know it is for admissions to law school. I did that intentionally. 
