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PS draft, no clue what to think about it.. Please help!

Post by mreocc » Wed Nov 17, 2010 1:19 am

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Re: PS draft, no clue what to think about it.. Please help!

Post by jasonc. » Wed Nov 17, 2010 1:52 am

Get rid of the las two paragraphs. Lawschools dont want to know about "dreams" . You have to show good characteristics( which you did with scuba diving) trying to tell us your motivation
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Re: PS draft, no clue what to think about it.. Please help!

Post by The Gentleman » Wed Nov 17, 2010 2:02 am

Just a quick thought: using the present verb tense in your opening paragraph didn't feel right. I think it would read better in past tense.
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Re: PS draft, no clue what to think about it.. Please help!

Post by 3|ink » Wed Nov 17, 2010 2:31 am

The Gentleman wrote:Just a quick thought: using the present verb tense in your opening paragraph didn't feel right. I think it would read better in past tense.
Yeah. He maintained it throughout that paragraph. Past tense would be better.
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Re: PS draft, no clue what to think about it.. Please help!

Post by mreocc » Wed Nov 17, 2010 3:20 am

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