This is the original sentence with the sentence that preceeds it:
Heraclitus once said that “opposition brings concord” and that “out of discord comes the greatest harmony.” This apparent paradox means that one, whether society or an individual, requires to be exposed to opposing views, and must be challenged in order to grow.
What I'm thinking of replacing it with is:
...that one's, whether a society's or an individual's, world views must be challenged for them to grow.
or
...that one, whether a society or an individual, must be exposed to views other than their own in order to grow.
or something else
How do I make this sentence easier to understand Forum
- gin
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- rinkrat19
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Re: How do I make this sentence easier to understand
I'd leave out 'whether society or an individual'. It doesn't add anything essential, and cutting it would clean up the sentence a fair bit.
Also, did Heraclitus 'say' that or 'write' it? I'm betting it's a quote from his written works, yes? Be precise; use 'wrote.'
'Once' is unneccesary. Dude's been dead for like a million years. It doesn't have to be made clear that he wrote this quote once upon a time in the past.
Heraclitus wrote that “opposition brings concord” and that “out of discord comes the greatest harmony.” This apparent paradox means that one's world views must be challenged in order to grow.
(Also, personally, I prefer the one-word 'worldview' to 'world view,' but both are valid.)
Also, did Heraclitus 'say' that or 'write' it? I'm betting it's a quote from his written works, yes? Be precise; use 'wrote.'
'Once' is unneccesary. Dude's been dead for like a million years. It doesn't have to be made clear that he wrote this quote once upon a time in the past.
Heraclitus wrote that “opposition brings concord” and that “out of discord comes the greatest harmony.” This apparent paradox means that one's world views must be challenged in order to grow.
(Also, personally, I prefer the one-word 'worldview' to 'world view,' but both are valid.)
- gin
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Re: How do I make this sentence easier to understand
I don't think there are any surviving writings from him (though I might be wrong), thats why I wrote "said".
Thanks a lot. I was really struggling with this particular sentence.
Thanks a lot. I was really struggling with this particular sentence.
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Re: How do I make this sentence easier to understand
Oh, someone else wrote it down in their writings? 'Said' would be fine, then, if Person B is quoting H. Unless, of course, B is quoting a written work of H.gin wrote:I don't think there are any surviving writings from him (though I might be wrong), thats why I wrote "said".
Thanks a lot. I was really struggling with this particular sentence.

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Re: How do I make this sentence easier to understand
gin wrote:This is the original sentence with the sentence that preceeds it:
Heraclitus once said that “opposition brings concord” and that “out of discord comes the greatest harmony.” This apparent paradox means that one, whether society or an individual, requires to be exposed to opposing views, and must be challenged in order to grow.
What I'm thinking of replacing it with is:
...that one's, whether a society's or an individual's, world views must be challenged for them to grow.
or
...that one, whether a society or an individual, must be exposed to views other than their own in order to grow.
or something else
Why not use something like this if you want to keep the individuals/society theme:
...that both the individual and society as a whole must be exposed to alternative world views in order to grow.
- gin
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Re: How do I make this sentence easier to understand
that's perfect. thanksstarrydreamz3 wrote:gin wrote:This is the original sentence with the sentence that preceeds it:
Heraclitus once said that “opposition brings concord” and that “out of discord comes the greatest harmony.” This apparent paradox means that one, whether society or an individual, requires to be exposed to opposing views, and must be challenged in order to grow.
What I'm thinking of replacing it with is:
...that one's, whether a society's or an individual's, world views must be challenged for them to grow.
or
...that one, whether a society or an individual, must be exposed to views other than their own in order to grow.
or something else
Why not use something like this if you want to keep the individuals/society theme:
...that both the individual and society as a whole must be exposed to alternative world views in order to grow.
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